2020-12-08 09:44 北京新航道
12月3日雅思大作文真题参考范文 | 年轻人应该遵循传统，还是率性而为？
Some people think that young people should follow the traditions of the society. Others think young people are free to behave as individuals.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
范文及解析
01
Some young people are ashamed of the adherence to tradition, while strongly advocating rebellion and freedom. To me, tradition has never been a yoke to freedom.
解析
立场：遵循传统和率性而为不矛盾
02
Young individuals identified as independent-minded usually behave differently from theirconservative peers. Their lessconventional behavior stems from the resistance to some traditional customs, lifestyles or thoughts that should have been eliminated in today’s society. With these outdated values — the obsession with a permanent job and the stereotype of men being the breadwinners while women the housewives — in mind, how could young adults be innovative? If that is the case, then why bother with these values?
解析
内容：讨论率性而为的理。
论证：抽象话题写作，在论述过程中要“接地气”，化抽象为具体是关键。
措辞：所选词的正负评价性要妥当，当需要“破除老旧的传统观念”时，措辞如outdated, obsession, stereotype等都是贬义向的用词。
措辞：以问句的形式推进逻辑论证
03
However, if all the traditions set by predecessors are removed, what remains would be a disorderly society, where non-compliance becomes the only rule. As a matter of fact, the freedom of behaving as individuals, in many cases, is not contradictory to following the tradition, i.e positive ones. Simply put, it is hard to imagine one person deliberately disrespecting others, just to flaunt individuality, and why diligence or patriotism, traditional virtues like these, cannot be used as individual labels? At the same time, preaching individuality may signify selfishness and irresponsibility. Encouraging the young to violate tradition, the propagation is a discontinuation of one's social identity, but to members of society, as inter-dependent individuals, it is an obligation to perpetuate this social identity in the community.
解析
内容：讨论遵循传统的理由
论证：抽象话题写作，在论述过程中要“接地气”，化抽象为具体是关键
措辞：以问句的形式加强论证力度
04
In conclusion, abiding by the tradition of society and behaving as individuals can co-exist. What a young person chooses to do depends on what kind of individual he or she wants to be.
解析
总结上文信息，加上适度的展望
